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ostracize the wounded; listen!

to the way they graze over sidewalks,
varicose:
              un! deux! trois! quatre! cinq!
counting bones and the chipped teeth
of sun-browned children,  they come
wanting:
              six! sept! huit! neuf! dix!

plus one/subtract the liver, and stipple
the ribs  with  paint;  this  thin  viscus,
crippled  with  veins  -  -  stilled  eyes
some porphyry and  feldspar  flecked,
from dune:
                onze! douze! treize! quatorze! quinze!
counting small rodents and bag pipes  -  -
lisping fingers  from  the wagon train
like pale arachnids between the spokes,
and still they come with their
                         tarsals and metatarsals
severed, splintered, slivered, silvered;
the tranquil wounded,  they  are  cold - -
and azure - -
they march:
                seize! dix-sept! dix-huit! dix-neuf! vingt!
they count small blue toes,
and the beetles between them.
©2008-2009 ~theunbeingdead
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woo!

Daily Deviation

Given 2008-06-28

I found in Viscera, by ~theunbeingdead, something I haven't discovered in poetry in quite some time: the inherent want--desire--need to read, and re-read the words until each made sense with the other and the meaning constructed, destroyed, and reconstructed itself. (Featured by `GeneratingHype)

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:iconeachangels:
How did you post this at school?

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:iconnegated:
god this is so good

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:iconshadowkitsunekirby:
The "listen!" really dragged me in from the front page...and I'm glad it did. I'm not really much of a poetry person but I like this a lot.

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:iconlilac-hime:
Very beautiful. I completely agree with the artist who suggested this for a DD; I did find myself rereading the words as I tried to place their meanings together. ^^

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:+fav:
I love how we imediately get into the action and try to figure out what is happening out of so many unexpected images

My favorite is probably
and still they come with their
tarsals and metatarsals


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:icontokyo-moon:
So different from other stuff I've read, I love it! :+fav:

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:iconjenealia:
this is really fantastic. What language are the numbers in? latin, right?

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:iconkinjadahedgie:
Wow..this is simply amazing, yet disturbing at the same time lol. The numbers were in French,correct?

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:iconwhenthemooncriedout:
such wonderful poetry deserves such praise. It's a very awe-inspiring. i've never been swept off of my feet like this since years ago. Great Job. Ut Deus exsisto palma!

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